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Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:01/11/2010
Critique:An interesting story but it leaves me somewhat confused. Did she actually kill her mother or is it just a part of her imagination thinking she did. At the end she is calling for her mom and dad. Also, how did she get hundreds of miles from home? Your story is entertaining but there are unexplaimable gaps that leaves the reader puzzled.

Grade:Good


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Main CritiquePosted by: Leeana14 on 01/11/2010 03:44 PM
Well the truth is that I just make it up as I go along. So hopefully I will be able to answer some of your questions, and still leave the reader wondering. Thank you for your comments! Post #2071


 
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