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Finally Free


 


The night brings solace for the tempered and weary mind.


I awaken all through the night, to be a slave to pain.


Mystical vibrations float past my window pane


                


              Is it a sparrow coming to sing to me?


             Or, a humming bird, who sounds as sweet.


 


Dreary rain washes my mind


with dancing drops on my window pane



Am I not worthy of being set free?


 



              Who’s there I call out?


               


 A sound so near,         


               


 


                Yet,                    


 


                                                 Too far,          


 


                To see.




             


            Are you here,


            to take care of me? 



 


Drumming on my washed window pane.


 


Maybe tomorrow, I will be free.




The day brings light, sound and rain,



 


         dancing butterflies are


         saying their goodbyes.


 


                        Please oh please, oh my,


                    someone come and take this pain


                   away from me.



 


Laughter comes and goes.


I wait to see what tomorrow will bring


          


            They will come back!


            And take me away.


           


 


I will be,             


 


Set free, at’ last 





 


                Faded,


 


Dreary,


 


 


                Dark,   


 


Yet,           


 



Dazzling stars.                                        


A quiet heart.


 


 


 


Dreaming...,




                   I am finally free. 



by Katina (Viewed 156 times)

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Given By: Englishpam
Critique Date:05/26/2008

Critique:Your poem touched me deeply.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:05/26/2008

Critique:This is a very beautiful. One can feel the longing for freedom from pain, so much so that there's a sense of hushed tranquility I feel at the end, of being free from pain, if only by dreaming. A little prayer I send on your way, that  tonight (not just in your dreams), even just for a while, there will be no pain.  

Grade:Excellent


Given By: CountryAngel
Critique Date:05/26/2008

Critique:Kat, This poem really touched my heart !I feel as though I wnt to take your pain away for you...God be with you, and your angel watch over you always..You know your in my heart and prayers.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: bluemoon
Critique Date:05/25/2008

Critique:This is a really powerful write. I love the first part of the poem, you present your feelings in such a beautiful way, almost Shakespearian. The second part is more disturbing to me. Maybe I misunderstand, but I guess when the pain is so bad you sometimes feel prepared to sacrifice everything for the pain to go away. This is about the 3rd time i've come back to this poem, it got to me somehow & it won't leave my mind.
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Grade:Excellent


 
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