CATEGORY: Song Writing


Heart

Heart, I know love’s been hard on you,

And I’m sorry for the things I’ve put you through,

 Before, you start to break on me,

or ask for sympathy,

I need to make you see,

 Oh heart, I’m not sure it’s been long enough,

 To say that I feel is really love, There is just one way to learn,

 Sometimes we’ll get burned, And right now it’s our turn Give it time,

 Help me through, Heart we can do this together,

 You’re my strength, You’re my soul, I need you now more than ever Heart,

 all the hurt will soon be gone, If you, if you just keep on beating strong,

 You will always be my friend,

So keep on hanging in, And we’ll find love again Give it time (give it time),

Help me through (help me), Heart we can do this together,

You’re my strength (you’re my strength),

 You’re my soul, I need you now more than ever… Heart,

I know I’ve been hard on you, I’m sorry for the things I’ve put you through,

Please, don’t you break on me, I need to make you see,

 It wasn’t meant to be, ‘Cause you will always be my friend,

So keep on hangin’ in, And we’ll find love again



by keeyley (Viewed 181 times)

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Other Critiques of this Work
Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:11/18/2007

Critique:Nice lyrics. It seems to come straight from the heart. It could be a great song with the right melody.

Grade:Good


Given By: Ale E
Critique Date:08/22/2007

Critique:This was really good. I especially liked the last 2 lines. The flow was pretty good and I wouldnt' really change much. Nicely penned.

Grade:Good


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:08/22/2007

Critique:Hey Keeyley, just finished you song "Heart". Sought of made me feel I need to pick up an instrument again and I hope your lyric's pleases you too. Been doing this long Keeyley? I enjoy good writing no matter in what form. It comes down to what you can put in text. My advise is keep up what your doing and maybe it will work out for you. Glad to see you on One Stop. Dennis

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:08/21/2007

Critique:

Grade:Good


 
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