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She'll never be me

You know I'm one of a kind;


Boy what's this I see,


This girl she looks just like me,


Blond hair and dressed to a T,


You tell me how can this be,


If she knew I was the one,


Who you used tolove


Yeah,


But you don't want to talk about it


When you think you can find


Someone to fill my shoes


And you ask yourself why


That she can't do the thing I do


And you can't deny


That everywhere you go


You see my face and my name


And it eats you up inside

You know I'm one of a kind


There'll never be another me

Can't get me out of your mind


You're lost in your own fantasy


And when you look in my eyes


Is it hard for you to realize

She'll never be me

Why can't you see girl


That your divinity


Whenever he's watching me...

He's really thinking you'll be

she maybe fine and stuff

But she'll never be me!



by keeyley (Viewed 209 times)

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Other Critiques of this Work
Given By: Sgt B
Critique Date:01/30/2008

Critique:Neat story, But then how do you know he wasn't thinking of another while with you? Hmmmm j/k. Nice lines And when you look in my eyes Is it hard for you to realize She'll never be me. This one sticks it to "Him" All in all a good poem. Thanx for sharing it here.

Grade:Good


Given By: wewerethere1
Critique Date:01/25/2008

Critique:Wow. I really like this. Not only is it fit for a song but when I read it the word rythmy as in I could feel the rythm. Thanks a lot for sharing.

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:09/06/2007

Critique:Just need some music and away it goes. Have you put this to music yet, just curious? All three of your songs have merit. I have a friend in Canada that has his own music studio and will try to get him to read your stuff. He puts music together from all parts of the country. Dennis

Grade:Good


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:08/21/2007

Critique:Oh, I love this song, wow. This is great Sarah!

Grade:Excellent


 
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