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(I wonder)Where You Are

You brought me to the highest Mountain,

Out of my, deep despair.

You probably have no idea How much i need you right now

I'm still stuck in the past  And you are moving on

Not too long ago You took me by my hand

you wipped my tear

s you got rid of all my fears

but...but...there you go 

I even got a heartache trying to figure out What to do with all those memories

You and I had

Well isn't that sad?

You're not who you used to be

Your acting like somebody

That i don't know

Baby you should change If you wanna be....

with me...Remember all those hours laughing on the floor

Those days of doing nothing fell like nothing we did before

And I wonder where your gone

And i wonder where you are?

oooooooooooo..oh oh yeahi wonder where you are?

OOOOH...where you...Are, 

where you ...are.



by keeyley

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Given By:[Deleted User]
Critique Date:08/22/2007

Critique:

Grade:Average


Given By: Ale E
Critique Date:08/22/2007

Critique:Wow. I really enjoyed this. Very Good indeed. In line 7 however I think there is an incompete word that you might want to check. VEry nice lyrical feel to this and overall good flow. I especially liked the first few lines.

Grade:Good


 
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