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A nest of tenderness is the night

That night – knitted lace
of fingers,
silver feather
the handful gathered like in a nest
hatched by candles light.
Ethereal touch…
I sipped from you with delight.
I stopped my breath
from fear that you might fly away.
That beautiful night
your eyes were burning like a candle
and all the branches on me caught the fire.
The grass started bursting…
Along my clenched hands
I felt your lips circling…
I don’t wait for the sunny morning.
A nest of tenderness is the night.

by tndr (Viewed 89 times)

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Given By:	Katina
Critique Date:	07/23/2008

Critique:	Good write! The images were well done. There is a romantic over tone, soft, subtle, and elegant. My favorite part: "That night – knitted laceof fingers, silver featherthe handful gathered like in a nesthatched by candles light." I also liked how you structured the poem, the line breaks in the first stanza, italics and color all made the poem a better read! Glad to have you join us! I will be reading more of your work. Have you entered the Spring Fling Writing Competition yet? I think you should.


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Given By:	Dennis
Critique Date:	07/21/2008

Critique:	Very romantic and sensual, almost urgent in the passion of love. I think you inspire the reader to remember their last time they were caught up in the moment and what it ment to them. A good write and presentation.


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