CATEGORY: Poetry

[Relentless Writing 7 Tokens]

To My Love

I remember when I was young and my heart hurt for the first time


My Mumma told not to cry – the right one will come along


 


So I dreamed a dream that all of us have


A dream of a love that’s true


A dream where I was happy


A dream of a man like you.


 


When I found you I had already lived a life


A life full of hurt and pain


But I was still thankful for my experiences


They had made me tuff again.


 


I didn’t believe that true love was possible


I didn’t believe my dream would come true


I found it hard to believe good men exists


Until the day that I met you.


 


You made me feel so warm inside


I loved you the moment we met


And all the time we spent together


Is time I will never regret.


 


You’re a love I will always be happy about


You’re the love I’ve seen in my dreams


You’re the one that makes me happy


Atleast for now that’s how it seems


 


 



by Trene (Viewed 211 times)

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Other Critiques of this Work
Given By: Sam U Elle
Critique Date:10/31/2008

Critique:wow, I was moved, you poured your heart out. And I like the ending rhymes, well done! Sam U. Elle  

Grade:Good


Given By: Sgt B
Critique Date:09/02/2008

Critique:To over come pain is not an easy thing to do. Sometimes we write about it & it hepls, Sometimes it brings back the pain. But it is good to see you overcome! You always seem to let your emotions flow in your work.   Good job here as well.

Grade:Excellent


Given By:[Deleted User]
Critique Date:08/01/2008

Critique:Glad to see a happy poem from you Trene. I'm still your biggest fan. Love you lots.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Brad
Critique Date:08/01/2008

Critique:It's so nice 2 c u happy again Mum. love ur work.xoxox

Grade:Good


 
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