CATEGORY: Poetry


In the City


In the City






If she ever slept, she would miss the world.


Her eyes follow every hope carried over concrete earth.


Her hands hold the light amidst the dark days of underdevelopment,-


She is the beacon to every eye,


And the home to any who'll challenge her harsh realities


To linger in her endless possibilities.


She is the beat to every world sound,


And the voice to every weary traveler's tale.




"Across the bridge and in the city is where it will happen,"


He tells his brother before he turns out the light.




Across the bridge and in the city is where you will see it all from a sky scraper's view,-


And where you'll sink lower than the sewers that rattle underneath her skin.


Every face will be shaped differently,


And every heart is thick from her merciless dealings.


But she rewards like no other.


For her beauty is so mystified and rare,


That when you find the gutter jewel she so desperately tries to hide,


You will feel her heart more than any other ever beating in your own.




And the lights go out,...




...but not in the city.




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Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:08/16/2008

Critique:Storyteller. I think this is your best work yet, well, what I have seen so far. You capture the pace of a city while interacting your character in the dealings. NYC, for example never sleeps, someone doing something all the time around the clock. Good flow, it read easily and made alot of sense. You also make your character a desired figure, one that stands out from others. Enjoyed the read.

Grade:Excellent


 
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