CATEGORY: Romance Writing


Alba

Alba1

I touched her red lips 2

But Alba bleeds in my arms 3

Got lost in her venomous kiss4

But Alba bleeds in my arms 5

Drowned in those virgin waters 6

Ran away from the doomed shores7

Ran away from her sweet memories 8

From my sweet Alba that haunts my insanity 9

Carving shadowy images of your dead body10

Of our unconsumed love11

As I bleed 12

For you my sweet Alba 13

As I'm being torn apart from cruelty that bears your name14

From this lust that never ends 15

I just wanted to love you my sweet Alba16

Get lost inside you 17

Make you mine18

But now you're gone with your sins19

I touched her dead body20

But Alba bleeds in my arms21



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Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:09/11/2008

Critique:An interesting romance poem somewhat on the dark side of love. To yearn for something you can never have is sad, and yet, if the memories of the person fulfill a need then that is all that is left. So many different ways to look at what we call love, they all count and it means something to somebody, so, is there a judge for the perfect love, I do not think so, it is a matter of perspective. Good write, made me think.

Grade:Good


 
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