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Nothing New

Karmic ,Revelation.

Contemplation, Segregation.

Throughout The Nations.

Confusion, Wrecking Creations.

Damnation or Divination.

What Has Been Formulated?

Will It ascend Undone?

No Time For Preparation.

Will This End Our Nation?

Will It Be a Revelation?

Secrets Codes Abode.

Sleepers Await The Next Mode.

Causing Caos, Flushing Our Economy,

Down the commode.

Government Silence Means Non-Compliance.

When The Time Comes.

There Will Be Nowhere To Run.

Judgement Day Awaits You.

You've already heard.

Our Lord And Savior Always had the last word.

by Quaneefah (Viewed 112 times)

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Given By:	Katina
Critique Date:	09/26/2008

Critique:	Powerful! T I found the poem thought provoking, intense, and eye awakening. ---Thanks for joining! Favorite lines: " Contemplation Segragation. Throughout The Nations. Confusion Wrecking Creations. Damnation or Divination." This is the second time I have read the piece, and I like it even better! I also have a few additional suggestions, however it may be my own personal taste for sentence structure/punctuation. There seems to be a need for the use of commas and (less capitalization in some areas). More so for the (,). The capitalization is an artist choice. I would wait until you receive additional feedback before changing it. One word mis-spell, "segragation=segregation." I like the use of real issues, doing so will broaden your reading audience. You have opened up some topics that are very important in America right now, writing about it helps to stimulate new ideas, change, direction. Lets hope the presidential candidates read your work, maybe they would be so kind to give you a review--"Its an idea!" Hey, Obama has a big website. Should we send him the link? I'll leave it up to you, although I doubt with the economic crises, he will have time or Kain to read anything that is not on their agenda. :) You have the right idea, knowing what to write about is important. Know who your audience is--you have done that well in this piece. Good work!
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Given By:	kuirq
Critique Date:	09/26/2008

Critique:	Each line seems to be able to stand on its own, having in each a single thought and yet it is one that complements and strengthens the next line. You tackle so many issues and yet you make the reader come to a full stop with your last line, somehow, the answer is all there in that one line. Thanks for sharing. Really quite thought-provoking.
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Given By:	CountryAngel
Critique Date:	09/25/2008

Critique:	This poem was deep. Alot for a person to think about. You are right, when judgement day comes The Lord has the last word. A-Men
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Given By:	Dennis
Critique Date:	09/25/2008

Critique:	Wow, some profound lines here and many concepts has the reader thinking. The ending clinches it, if you rely on history when nations rise and fall, all that seems to be left is faith and hope that man can carry on. Great poem and thanks for sharing it.
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