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I get the Blues

I don't know why I feel so blue

There's really nothing I can do

I shed a tear, and say:"My dear"

I am a wife, happy with my life

Mother, mommom, mother in law

Love when my grandchildren

walk in the door

They are so happy,

Even when I feel crappy

They love to come and stay with me

The little one I bounce on my knee

I laugh and smile

Try to hide, the blueness I feel

Way down, deep inside

I wonder if anyone feels like this

It's one of those days

I wish I could miss.

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Given By:	Sgt B
Critique Date:	10/21/2008

Critique:	Oh yes we all feel those blues now and then. If I try to hide them long enough you know what? They go away ;) Great job as always. ~Ron~


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Given By:	raenie
Critique Date:	10/06/2008

Critique:	I do think that you were able to express your feelings here pretty well, Diane--don't we all get these blue days? I particularly liked how you wrote your poem in a way that it is contrasting--meaning that you present the reasons why you should feel happy but despite it, the blue feeling is still there... my favorite line has got to be the last 2 lines--really made me read it back & just say "So true!" Thanks for sharing Diane, and I'm hoping that you're not feeling too blue...


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Given By:	Katina
Critique Date:	10/04/2008

Critique:	:) Good Job Diane! -I removed my other critique since it was more of a note than a review of your poem. Thank you for sharing your writing with us!


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