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A Single Rose








 A Single Rose (for winter)



For you, my love, I’ll be a single rose


of crimson hue and velvet to the touch.


So warm in contrast to your fallen snows,


yet yearning for the thrill of winter's clutch.


 


Soft petals form a heart so firm and true,


 unyielding to the tempest of your reign,


and though a cold wind nurtures doubt in you,


such purity of love I could not feign.


 


Dilemmas of the soul so keenly felt.


Bestow my love? or must it stay a dream?


for if I warmed your heart 'twould surely melt


and I would lose you to the flowing stream.


 


And so, my love, this single rose I’ll hide


and keep the love I feel for you inside.



by bluemoon (Viewed 2488 times)

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Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:01/28/2009

Critique:I do not know how this one got by me, I read it tonight. It is picture perfect, a faint and strange relationship with a harsh reality. Like the princess who entices the dragon to see her way. Interesting that thoughts like this enter your mind, best of all, you write about it. Great job!
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:11/17/2008

Critique:Perfect! I am speechless Sharon. I can't believe I allowed work, to come between reading something as beautiful as this. I don't know what else to say, other then, "publish this!"
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:11/15/2008

Critique:A very lovely, though bittersweet sonnet....hmmm...it seems you have a knack for the bittersweet.  And I love the questioning you posed in it. It tugs at the heart to know of such consequence. The words flow gently and so smoothly, it made me read it twice in a row. Thank you for this wonderful read, Sharon.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: raenie
Critique Date:11/15/2008

Critique:*sigh* I can't help but sigh after reading your sonnet--very bittersweet indeed and for some reason, I seem to be brought back to a different era, and also be reminded of Beauty and the Beast (with reference to the rose and winter). Unrequited love put into such eloquent words--I guess that this goes to show that out of something sad, something beautiful can come out of it...though it would be more beautiful if that single rose were not hidden...---As for my favorite line, very hard to choose, but I'll compromise and say the entire 3rd stanza, I just love the words that you used here, so vividly unique...hopefully you do get noticed by some publisher soon--you have such great talent!    
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: jacquiegum
Critique Date:11/14/2008

Critique:Oh my, I shed a tear over this. I admire your style and way of visually making your point. Dilemmas of the soul? I love the desription so much. Jacquie
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: StormxXxBoV
Critique Date:11/07/2008

Critique:I love "And so, my love, this single rose I’ll hide/ and keep the love I feel for you inside." I'm in awe, your talent is amazing.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Sgt B
Critique Date:11/07/2008

Critique:Such a lovely story, told in so few words. Great work hun, ~Ron~
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: enamoured
Critique Date:11/07/2008

Critique:Another BEAUTIFUL write Sharon!! I wish I had more than 4 stars to give in this case..Hmmmmm,I don't know which line to pick as my favourite, all of them are so good and again, magical!..Loved it !!
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: CountryAngel
Critique Date:11/06/2008

Critique:WOW, Bluemoon, this was powerful!
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Grade:Excellent


 
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