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Sweet Dreams
Sweet Dreams
summer slumbers deep
as winter breathes icy tales
sugar-frosted dreams
by bluemoon (Viewed 752 times)
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| Given By: |   enamoured 
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| Critique Date: | 01/05/2009 |
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| Critique: | Even when the challenge is as restircting as a haiku, you manage to do justice to it!! B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L!!!!:D...Each of these lines are so vivid in imagery and literally absorb the reader into their beautiful-fairly tale world. I love the last line--'Sugar frosted Dreams'...Keep it up Sharon!! Thanks for sharing this wonderful haiku.
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| Given By: |   kuirq
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| Critique Date: | 01/02/2009 |
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| Critique: | This haiku came across as lyrical and soporific (but in a good way, like a lullaby :)). I love the imagery you used here, of summer sleeping and dreaming, and winter as the Sandman (or Roald Dahl's BFG for that matter). And such a sweet way to say sweet dreams, too! May you have sugar-frosted dreams tonight! |
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| Given By: |  Dennis
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| Critique Date: | 01/01/2009 |
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| Critique: | So true, we all long for that summer dream, have to endure the winter's reign to get there. A short but thought invoking write. I think I will have a sugar frosted dream to night, thanks for the thought. Dennis |
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| Given By: |  raenie
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| Critique Date: | 01/01/2009 |
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| Critique: | Such a wonderful winter write you have here! I really like how you've managed to put so much imagery in such few lines, this really goes to show your talent in writing--I could just close my eyes & imagine Summer sleeping while Winter taking over--& just loove the last line, "sugar frosted dreams"--captures the haiku altogether! Thanks for sharing this & happy new year! :D |
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