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'twixt grass and oak

a fairy blessing with a warning



‘twixt grass and oak


 


‘twixt grassy tuft and bark of ancient oak,


as silky dew collects in crystal pools,


the chosen eye may witness faery folk,


though must remember ne’er to break the rules.


 


An honour and a charm bestowed upon


a child, who secrets promises to keep.


As dreamland calls and daylight hours are gone,


bough’s silver dust is sprinkled in her sleep.


 


A passage safe, both to and from their land


of harebell hats and wings of filigree.


In twilight dawn their blessing is at hand,


to keep her safe wherever she may be.


 


If of her precious gift she speaks, alas


she’ll ne’er see fae again 'twixt oak and grass.




Notes :


the word fairy is derived from the medieval French folklore term fae/faery.



according to legend the 'Silver Bough' allows safe passage to and from the Otherworld and was offered, by the faery queen, to worthy mortals.



the Harebell flower is said to have magical properties and is traditionally linked to faeries and witches (used to turn themselves into hares)



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Given By: guinevere
Critique Date:02/27/2009

Critique:The title alone is intriguing enough to make one want to read further. A thought provoking write which conveys perfectly the idea that there are magical places to which only a child’s imagination can access. The use of old word forms gives the piece a slight air of danger, warning that the safe passage is only for those who “ne’re to break the rules”. How easily am I imagining a small group of children uncovering an ancient inscription scored into the trunk of an old oak tree deep in the woods, sitting in hushed vigil hoping to be chosen to witness a glimpse of the elusive faery folk. A beautiful and atmospheric write, and all this in the form of a sonnet!

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Hendrick13
Critique Date:02/05/2009

Critique:This is great.  It is one of the stories that has one of those special tones to it that keeps you interested and makes you think about the words and think of when you were younger.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: enamoured
Critique Date:01/18/2009

Critique:Ah, this sonnet takes me back to childhood. Magic, mystery and love...I have to agree with Nikko and Ninna about being reminded of Enid Blyton! It's truely is an enchanting write. I love all the lines in this poem, so chosing a favourite is very difficult. How did you come up with this idea? I'm so glad you decided to start collecting poems for your book.:) Keep up the great work Sharon. Thanks for sharing **Shreya*
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:01/17/2009

Critique:What can I say, but this one reminded me of Enid Blyton as well. Nikko and I grew up reading Enid Blyton, and I absolutely loved her books, especially with stories about fairies and goblins, and of course the Enchanted Wood books. But back to your sonnet, I absolutely loved it :)! It's lyrical and magical. It took me back to that feeling of awe and wonder, reading about fairies and the magic of their kingdom and can't help but think that they might be real. The meter was perfect in giving it an old-fashioned touch, as if it was written so long ago, and it's been passed on to the present generation. I really appreciated the notes at the end, I love reading about those herbs and flowers that had magical properties. Thank you so much for this wonderful sonnet, it's lovely work, Sharon...perfect for children who love fairies...perhaps they'll see one some time and be given that silver bough!
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: raenie
Critique Date:01/16/2009

Critique:While reading this, I couldn't help but picture the illustrations that went with Enid Blyton's stories, they were so cute--in a nutshell, I was enchanted by this sonnet :)! You sure have a knack for writing children as well, and I absolutely am a fan of your work yet again. Reading this sonnet, I so wanted to be one of those fortunate children to be allowed access to Fairyland. --------It's hard for me to choose a favorite line, since each seems to be woven perfectly into your sonnet--hmm but I would go for " ‘twixt grassy tuft and bark of ancient oak,   as silky dew collects in crystal pools," just reading it is such an epitome of fairies...thanks so much for bringing me back to my Enid Blyton days...do keep writing some more!! :D
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: CountryAngel
Critique Date:01/16/2009

Critique:Excellent write, Sharin..
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Grade:Excellent


 
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