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A Picture of Love

Sometimes, all that remains is a photograph.



A Picture of Love


 


A glance across the void; a heartbeat trips,


a longing from within her essence yearns.


From Cupid’s bow on rose stained satin lips,


unfaltering, a tender smile returns.


  


No words in fury or raised voices plied;


the certainty of eyes forever kind; 


no restiveness when tears of sorrow cried,


as unvoiced ear drinks tales of troubled mind.


  


 A strong yet silent presence reassures;


unquestioning, uncritical and staid,


and through the lapsing years as life matures,


unchanging as past mem’ries are replayed.


 


In frames of time-suspended happiness,


lie photographs of love … no more … no less.



 



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Given By: Alexgia
Critique Date:03/18/2009

Critique:Beautifully done. I love the ending. suspended happiness...Beautiful. I agree with Katina you should pull them all together and make a book of them. This was amazing.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:03/05/2009

Critique:The last couplet is b-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l! What a write. Your work has improved to the point of sheer amazement. Its time you see your name in print. A collection of poems written by, Sharon Tideswell. I am giving you home work today. Write a 150 word bio, and get all of your writing together. I have asked other members to do the same. How soon they do it, and how soon they want to have their work published is up to them. Don't be like me and wait until you are sick of your own writing to send out your work :) Let me know when you have them all together, and if you need someone to help you review your bio/ this is required for querying a literary agent/ and or book publisher. Poetry is hard to get published, one at a time, its better to pull all of your work together and sell your book. Its more lucrative also. --Katina
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: soulpath
Critique Date:02/21/2009

Critique:My first observation is that I am amazed, that on a topic oif love you have a clean fresh approach. You have skillfully avoided it becoming sentimental and have in doing so expressed a deep sentiment and a true strength to the emotion, Besides being skillfully written too-goes without saying, Nice One Mike
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Ronin Sumomo
Critique Date:02/19/2009

Critique:This is beautifully written and extremely intricate. After reading this a handful of times I see that no troubles should exceed the value of a relationship if a photograph can remind one of the essence of those they love. Simple concept yet hard to execute. I appreciate how you brought this idea to life. Thank you
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: madaddicted
Critique Date:02/19/2009

Critique:A beautifully written poem as always. Keep up the good work!
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:02/19/2009

Critique:It's great to read another great sonnet from you that captures the reader's imagination. I especially loved the first stanza and the details you've included ("rose stained satin lips"--I love the alliteration and the description :D), and the last two lines ("time-suspended happiness"--I love the way you put it), I believe hold a great deal of truth for a lot of people.  It's a wonderful sonnet that makes us think of how indeed, sometimes, a photograph is all that remains after everything else. Thanks for sharing another of your beautiful sonnets, Sharon.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: raenie
Critique Date:02/19/2009

Critique:You've captured such a different approach on lost love here Sharon...sometimes indeed pictures are the only testament of that love, but having those makes what one had so real. I particlarly loved how you made use of photography terms (such as lapse and frames) to tie into the theme of your sonnet. You've managed once more to write such an eloquent piece, thank you for sharing this...
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: guinevere
Critique Date:02/17/2009

Critique:Beautiful sonnet, the seeming simplicity belies the complexities of the constraints involved. A haunting vision of a past love never forgotten, and kept alive by the comforting but poignant presence of a treasured photograph.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: CountryAngel
Critique Date:02/17/2009

Critique:Great write Sharon.
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Grade:Excellent


 
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