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Why Roosters crow in the morning

    

            Gaea, the Goddess of Nature, would sit every morning and watch her daughter Mirandah, the Goddess of Mornings, perform some of the most beautiful magic, creating the morning dew, and placing it on each blade of grass and flower in the field until it was perfected.  She would work diligently from midnight till noon, creating the perfection, moon beams, sun’s rays and the smell of fresh morning air.

 

            One afternoon, Mirandah came to her Mother looking very sad.

 

            “What is wrong my child?” asked Gaea.

 

            “Why do I work so very hard Mother?  If the people sleep so late and miss all the beautiful magic I have created?  The only ones who see it are the animals.”

 

            “Well my child, why don’t we try rising the sun earlier, that I’m sure will wake the people to see the beauty that you have created.”

 

            “All right Mother, let’s try it,” Smiled Mirandah.

 

            With that, Mirandah slept, beautiful dreams danced in her head, planning every detail for the people to see in the early morning when they woke.

 

            The next few days she performed some of the most beautiful scenes even Gaea had ever seen.

 

            Unfortunately, the people still slept.

 

            Mirandah was very hurt by this, so she thought and she thought.

 

            One week later she approached her Mother again.

 

            “Mother, I have an idea.” She said, trying to control her enthusiasm, “and this plan might just work!”

 

            “Yes my child, please tell me,” answered Gaea.

 

            “Light will not wake the people, but sound might.”  Mirandah went on the explain, “Most of the animals are very busy early in the morning, with the exception of one, while the hens are laying the breakfast eggs, the roosters have nothing to do, and they are as colorful and beautiful as my mornings.  What would you say if the roosters were to crow a good morning to all the people?  Their voices are very loud and carry for miles.”

 

           

    

Gaea thinks on this for awhile, and seeing the excitement on her daughters face, “All right, let’s try it my child,” she smiles.

 

            That night Mirandah visited every rooster and asked them to please help her with this task.

 

            The roosters all agreed, after all this was an important job for them.

 

            Between getting the morning ready, and visiting all the roosters, Mirandah was very tired.

 

            She sat with Gaea and they waited, at 5:00, she sent the agreed upon signal to all the roosters at once, and nervously waited.

 

            The roosters stood proudly upon the fences, and began to crow, the signal you see, was the sun beginning to make its long journey up into the sky.

 

            Bedroom lights started to come on, and the people were up and looking out their windows, some even standing outside.

 

            They came out and saw the magical beauty of Mirandah’s work, and they smiled.

 

            Thus started the tradition of roosters crowing in the morning.

 

                                                            Angela Peacock

 



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Given By: enamoured
Critique Date:08/06/2008

Critique:Awesome work!!Love the imagery!! An illustrater book would do very well.The story is simple, sweet and consise.Something that every child would enjoy. Except for a few typos and editorial errors  there is nothing else that I find worth suggesting!! Four stars for this remarkable piece!cheers:)  

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Luna Tique Fringe
Critique Date:12/03/2007

Critique:This is a beautiful story, very well suited for children. Simple language, simple concepts, and just the right length for the average attention span. It is very reminicent of the stories from the Native American traditions. A couple of small suggestions... In paragraph one..I would change this: 'perform some of the most beautiful magic' ... I would cut 'some of the most' and leave it simply 'perform beautiful magic' In this sentence: 'The next few days she performed some of the most beautiful scenes even Gaea had ever seen.' I would change it to this: 'The next few days she created the most beautiful scenes Gaea had ever seen." The reason for these two suggestions comes from my opinion that children relate beter to absolutes. The only other suggestion is with the last line. I think 'thus began' might sound better. Just semantics, though. Well thought out concept, fleshed out perfectly. All the stars, I have to give and more. :)

Grade:Excellent


Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:11/12/2007

Critique:A quaint story that was reminiscent of legends so common in our country. Thanks for sharing this. I could imagine an illustrated book out of it.

Grade:Good


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:10/02/2007

Critique: You have a gift of story telling that is for sure. I really liked how you gave the roosters names. The theme was also interesting. Your use of dialog is strong in this piece. There are a few minor editorial things nothing major. :) My only suggestion for this piece is the ending, it seemed a little abrupt. You may want to add another paragraph before the last or one after that, just to round it out a little. Other than that I feel that you have a great story here. I am going to read the other story you posted previously. Thank you for putting this up for us to read, good job author!

Grade:Good


Given By:[Deleted User]
Critique Date:10/01/2007

Critique:This is EXCELLENT! (hence the four stars!!) Honestly, aside from some comma's and adding a.m. to 5:00 a.m. there is nothing i can suggest. The entire piece is colorful and simple, just as a children's story should be. I love this. If you add more to it for any reason, please let me know so I can reread it. If you dont mind I would like to print off a copy to share with my family :) GREAT Job! Oh, one last thing, i might consider a title change. It seems not enough for such a splendid writing :)

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:10/01/2007

Critique:Very nicely written and a cute little story. Is there more to this story? Is this part of your book or one of the many stories you intend to get published? I guess you considered finding an illustrator or do you do that yourself? One again, good work.

Grade:Good


 
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