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Embers of Life




Embers of Life.


 


Armchair pulled close to the fire’s gentle heat,


a faithful old tabby cat curled at her feet.


Gossamer threads of elusive thought,


struggle to gather each memory sought.


 


Once deep blue eyes, now paling with age


staring at embers of dying days.


Relentlessly ticking, the clock on the shelf


marks twilight years of fading health.


 


The battered old tin holds so much from the past,


photos of grandchildren growing so fast.


Searching through images, pets now long gone,


captured in time on a manicured lawn


 


One almost hidden, beneath all the rest,


pulled out with frail hands, and held to her breast.


Strains of Glen Miller replay in her head


as her mind takes her back to the day she was wed.


 


So many years, yet life’s still too brief,


so much already spent suffering with grief.


A bitter sweet smile, a single tear shed,


silently grieving for words left unsaid.


 


Greying head nodding, so heavy, so tired.


Staying awake, so much effort required.


The small pile of photographs slide to the floor


as sleep gently lets her live past times once more.


 



 



 



by guinevere

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Given By: soulpath
Critique Date:03/04/2009

Critique:Sorry to sound boring , but I too found the line Gossamer threads superb, an excellent read, thank you
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: raenie
Critique Date:03/02/2009

Critique:I really loved how you were able to paint this picture of an old lady with your words, Guinevere...I could just picture this poem in my head and also feel the warmth at the same time. I particularly liked the lines, " Gossamer threads of elusive thought, struggle to gather each memory sought."... I just loved how these lines come together with that imagery. Your title also fits so well with your poem & I truly enjoyed reading it. Thanks for this lovely piece!
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:03/02/2009

Critique:The visions you painted were great, an old lady with years of memory that old photos can spur, bringpng back days that were perhaps easier to live.. The flow was good and the rhyming worked well, keep up the good work.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: bluemoon
Critique Date:03/02/2009

Critique:Another lovely write guinevere, rich in image and atmosphere. I could almost hear those 'strains of Glen Miller.' Your poem reminded me of 'labelled with love'. You tell a complete story with great rhyme & flow.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: CountryAngel
Critique Date:03/01/2009

Critique:I like this write very much. To me it sounds like a dear women had her time on earth some good and some not so good, thinking about her life.  The end came. Rhyming nicely.  
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Grade:Excellent


 
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