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Passage to Spring

Passage to Spring

Relentless grip of winter slows,

harboured flora shyly grows

amid still naked woodland trees;

soft pools of purple crocuses.

Spectral sun bathes frigid air,

enticing growth of nature's fayre.

Final snowfalls deliquesce,

then fade to green with clear finesse.

Snowdrops briefly bridge the gap

'tween earth's new dawn and winter's nap,

delicately lingering

'fore slowly yielding to spring.

by bluemoon (Viewed 346 times)

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Given By:	[Deleted User]
Critique Date:	05/11/2009

Critique:	Wow! You have alot of writings here and alot of awards. You must do good work. I'll come back and review some more of your work.
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Given By:	Superman Complex
Critique Date:	05/10/2009

Critique:	You have a classical style that is on display here....good work.
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Given By:	Alexgia
Critique Date:	04/06/2009

Critique:	Very beautiful poem. I love spring and this poem brings up so many feelings of it. Snowdrops what a great descriptive word. Loved it.
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Given By:	raenie
Critique Date:	04/05/2009

Critique:	Loved the title, loved the poem even more--it's just really refreshing to read your poem since you take the reader with you, and I can't help (yet again!) but feel that spring is upon us here in sunny Philippines, hehe (how I wish!) Mr. Sun's shining at his brightest these days, so some fresh Spring air would indeed be most welcome--and I have to thank you for at least bringing Spring to life in your words...loved this line: Spectral sun bathes frigid air, enticing growth of nature's fayre. could just imagine Winter melting in Sun's warm embrace...thanks again for such an inspiring write Sharon, could always count on a beautiful read from you...:)
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Given By:	kuirq
Critique Date:	04/04/2009

Critique:	I love the rhythm and flow of this one. It's great to read out loud. You got me thinking back to iambs and trochees! ...and you had me counting syllables, hehe, at least I think it's safe to say it's not a pentameter (unless my math's gone awry!) Reading this reminded me of Kate Greenaway. I suppose it's because it's like the old rhymes that spoke of seasons and flowers, which I somehow associate with her illustrating nursery rhymes, am I making sense? Have a wonderful joyous spring while we have a hot summer! Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem, Sharon :).
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Given By:	CountryAngel
Critique Date:	04/02/2009

Critique:	Sharon, You said it the way it goes.... Very nice.
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