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Midsummer Dream
“cÓme with me, follÓw me, ‘neath the Óld apple tree,
by bluemoon (Viewed 318 times)
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| Given By: |   kuirq 
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| Critique Date: | 06/08/2009 |
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| Critique: | I'm glad to see your poem here. :D And it's great that it came out the same here. And I don't know, for some reason, it looks more refreshing and summer-y here. Hehe. Or maybe it's because it's daylight. It sure is a lovely piece and so inviting to the eyes. Makes me want to just sit back and relax. And you can't help but read it all in one go. Hmm. A thought just occurred to me, maybe you could make the o's red? To make them look like apples ;). Or do you think it could be a bit distracting? All the same, it's a very interesting poem, I love everything about it. Thanks for sharing this novel idea and for the great read....I'm grabbing an apple now ;). |
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| Given By: |  Katina
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| Critique Date: | 06/08/2009 |
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| Critique: | Beautiful poem Sharon. I enjoyed the color scheme, shape and sentiment of the words. I had to admit, shape poetry is one of my favorites! Good job creating this piece, a nice addition to your collection of 4 star poems here at One Stop Write Shop. You are so ready to publish your book. --Katina |
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| Given By: | Dennis
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| Critique Date: | 06/08/2009 |
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| Critique: | It amazes me, where do you come up with it? Your poem intices the reader to take a quick trip to explore the visions you have created with a feeling of satisfaction. Your presentation was great too. all I can say is wow. |
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| Given By: |  raenie
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| Critique Date: | 06/07/2009 |
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| Critique: | Your shape poem sure is a wonderful addition to your roster of beautiful poems--and I just love the idea of shape poetry (together with the color scheme too, the possibilities are endless!)--you've sure opened a new door to explore this form of poetry, I sure would want to try it myself...Reading your poem is a trea, both visually and mentally and I just love the image of that apple tree and just enjoying the shade, truly such a summer thing to do! Looking forward to reading more of your shape poetry and thanks again for posting this :D |
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