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Safe Harbor

Safe Harbor


Long did I labor far into the night


Crafting pure words from my heart


Furtive feelings long held secret


Hidden and buried deep within




Filled with fear and anxiety


I launch my honest words


Fragile vessels those words of love


Cast on life"s harsh uncertain seas


 


Exposed to shoal and wind


Vulnerable to rock and wave


Would my words find safe harbor


In the gentle embrace of your heat


 


Or would they falter and sink


Victim to tempset and cruel waves


My emissaries slowly fade from view


With my fervent and desperate hopes


 


As they pass out of sight so far away


I prayed them to a safe reception


Fragile crafts my heartfelt emissaries


Tenderly crafted words of my soul


 


Will my fragile words of love


Find safe harbor in your heart



by WordSmith113

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Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:06/30/2009
Critique:"Tranquil" came into mind as I read your poem. It somehow had a soothing effect, very mellow. The inversion works well in most of the lines you used them in, it's good that you used it sparingly. There are some typos I'd like to point out: A missing r" in "heart" (3rd stanza, last line) and "tempest" (2nd line, 4th stanza). Also, I'm not sure if you intentionally left out the question marks in the 3rd and last stanzas. I rather think that since you posed the lines as questions, then question marks are expected. Thanks for sharing this, it' nice how your title fits perfectly to your words.
Grade:Good


Given By: kimberly.Lafortune
Critique Date:06/28/2009
Critique:this poem was touching.i love when someone writes about love.it always makes me cry.you should try to write more clear at what you are trying to say.
Grade:Good


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:06/11/2009
Critique:A question most lovers ask no matter what the scenario, who knows, a matter of judgement or not, are you willing to take what you see as choices in the pursuit of love? You bring the question to the table and I suppose it is a private choice, good job making your readers think about it.
Grade:Good


 
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