haiku (raindrops) - a 'Rain, Rain, Rain' contest entry

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haiku (raindrops) - a 'Rain, Rain, Rain' contest entry

haiku (raindrops)

the storm's first raindrops

trace paths down anxious windows

hints of tears to come

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by bluemoon (Viewed 337 times)

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Given By:	raenie
Critique Date:	10/18/2009

Critique:	I really loved how you approached the theme of rain (about the first raindrops)--a jampacked haiku that both has a literal and a figurative & deeper meaning and I was able to totally relate to it, loved all three lines...in such few words, you've managed to capture those raindrops on windows (I actually love watching them trickle down the glass...). Thanks so much for writing this for the contest and good luck in it-- I hope members will vote in the contest :)
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Given By:	madaddicted
Critique Date:	10/13/2009

Critique:	A calming write. As Raenie said, the raindrops down the windows was a great touch. Great job as always!
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Given By:	Katina
Critique Date:	10/04/2009

Critique:	Excellent haiku Sharon. I could see it raining, I could hear the rain drops. The imagery is well done!
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Given By:	kuirq
Critique Date:	10/04/2009

Critique:	Beautiful indeed! I love the personification. Who'd have thought windows could be described as anxious? But it makes perfect sense, nothing could be more fragile and come to think of it, they're one of the first ones to witness and feel nature's tears. I loved the imagery as well. Thanks for sharing this, perfect for our weather...although we'd prefer much less rain next time :).
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