| CATEGORY: Haiku |
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Choice
You may never fail
When you pursue the challenge
Until you give up
by Dennis (Viewed 903 times)
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| Given By: |   raenie 
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| Critique Date: | 12/28/2010 |
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| Critique: | Very good point you give here, Dennis :) I think we all need to realize this -- very profound message you give, thank you :) |
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| Given By: | [Deleted User] |
| Critique Date: | 10/12/2009 |
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| Critique: | Hi Dennis, I really like this. I know the concept isn't so original, how many times have we been told things like "If you never try, you'll never know!" or "give it a go, you might just succeed", but I love how you put that concept across so succinctly in the form of a haiku. The haiku form seems to give it so much more power, it makes the reader more receptive to hearing the message, less of a telling off or nagging, more of a revelation. You're absolutely right, success is never guaranteed, but if you give up then failure is a certainty. Great title too. This has come at a good time for me, you've just persuaded me to choose to fight on with certain things in my life. Thanks for this haiku Dennis. |
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