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Query on Hallows' Night

Gleam of moonshine this hallowed night...

lends its magic, or trick of light?

Silvery white that moon bestows,

fades pumpkin of sunbeam orange glow

sinister tendrils, wrinkles deep

hearts to choke, souls to reap

Gleam of moonshine this hallowed night,

lends its magic... or trick of light?

by raenie (Viewed 319 times)

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Given By:	madaddicted
Critique Date:	10/21/2009

Critique:	This is a perfect Halloween poem. It has a nice mischievous feel to it. It flows well and the imagery you used is amazing. I love the lines- Silvery white that moon bestows, fades pumpkin of sunbeam orange glow. Happy early Halloween!
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Given By:	bluemoon
Critique Date:	10/19/2009

Critique:	Hi Nikko, this is a great halloween poem, the tone is perfect. I love every word of it, and using the same couplet to open and close the poem works really well. My favourite lines - sinister tendrils, wrinkles deep hearts to choke, souls to reap. The title is okay, but perhaps something that reflects the sinister tone of the poem more closely would be good; Pumpkin of Halloween sounds quite cute. Thanks for sharing it with us :)
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