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A Life Once Lost: Act IV

Life Once Lost… (Can never be reclaimed)


As evening fell and cast its shadows on


The arid plain now wet from crimson tide,


It took the culmination of the might


Of all one thousand men gathered around


To hold back Michael’s rage and take him from


The field and return Michael to the camp.


He sulked, and raged, and languished in his tent.


He raved to all around about his loss


Until his throat ran dry as Sinai’s sea


Which sank the chariots of Merneptah


And doomed their lot like Ahab’s crew who clung


For like on Queequegs pitched Coffin boat


And granted Cana’s sons safe passage to


The plain of Rephidim and holy rock


Of Mt. Horeb, where desert winds did blow


The hot and arid sands and parch the throats


Of Cana’s sons, like Michaels present plight.


When weariness o’er-took Michael at last


He fell prostrate atop his bunk and slept.


The Dream


When pensive sleep befalls Michael at last


He fades into the different world of dream.


He tossed about most frantically as dreams


Of death and misery did grab his throat


And closed its iron grip around his neck,


Choking him like a hangman’s noose whish snuffed


Jocasta’s life right out of her and left


Her swinging like the limbo of a dream.


Through unknown eyes Michael witnessed it all;


He saw himself processing through gates


Of solid, ornate, sapphire greater


Than Ishtaar’s gate in its wondrous splendor.


He watched himself during this palisade;


He marched on regally through city streets


But when he cast his eyes unto the street


He saw it paved with severed heads of those


He killed in times of war and also saw


The severed heads of those who fought for him.


He walked indifferently and left a trail


Of blood as he continued on his march.


When Michael looked about the crowd he saw


The faces of one million innocents


All staring at his noble counterpart


With eyes as dead and gone as Eleanor,


Their lives cut short, the casualties of war


Their names go on in time no more.


But all the spectators were pierced betwixt


The ribs and through the heart by fatal point


Of deadly bow and arrow fired from


The hand of Michael’s conquering armies.


Beyond the silent crowd and parade route,


The stairs and mount of the Goddess’ temple


Hold host to Raphael and Gabriel.


They stood their deaf and blind with eyes and tongue


Cut out and Michael’s sword stuck in their backs.


They did not look at him, but held their gaze


Down at the ground and stare at the gaping chasm


Betwixt them and Michel, the seal of death


Which killed their brotherhood eternally.


When Michael saw this sight he charged the mount.


He walked an air across the gap until


He fell with mere inches separating


His fallen friends from him and plunging him.


Into the dark falls out from his dream.


Woke he did and screamed in fits of rage


He tore the sheets from off his burdened bed


And rose with haste as deathly thought swam through


His mind, trying to rectify the death


Of all his friends, his consciousness burdened


With grief, he lies back down, his bed is made.


 


 



by Rufo7725 (Viewed 278 times)

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Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:10/22/2009

Critique:Wow Rufo. I am totally impressed and wish I could write something so deep. Maybe it is because I do not read the bible as often as I should, you have the tale down pact. It is almost like it means so much to you like the last line expresses "With grief, he lies back down, his bed is made." And, here we go, life coming at you right or wrong and the choices we make. Definately thought provoking.
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Grade:Excellent


 
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