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Luna


Nights gone by and still,
Luna laments her lost love
tearful ocean born



by raenie (Viewed 297 times)

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Given By: Katina
Critique Date:03/27/2010
Critique:I came back to re-read and I still love it!
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: deekl51
Critique Date:03/08/2010
Critique:Enjoyed this haiku nicely done
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Grade:Good


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:12/02/2009
Critique:A really beautiful haiku. The first line sets a serene mood. The second line is pure fantasy but relates well with the third line where the moon rules the tides. Touching, and makes the reader think about the poissibilities.
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Grade:Good


Given By: CountryAngel
Critique Date:12/02/2009
Critique:I hate to say this, but the second verse has 8 syllables. Maybe it's the way I say it? Nice  Haiku.    
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Grade:Good


 
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