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Essence of Christmas
fragrant boughs of pine
adorned with yuletide magic
children's eyes aglow
by bluemoon (Viewed 302 times)
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| Given By: |   Dennis 
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| Critique Date: | 12/08/2009 |
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| Critique: | This sums up Christmas, it is about children and their imaginations that prolong the tradition form one generation to another. Your words are great, you say it and a warm feeling encompasses our memories and why we do it for our children, great writing in so few words. |
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| Given By: |  raenie
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| Critique Date: | 12/08/2009 |
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| Critique: | Hi Sharon! Yipes--weird thing happened again, I totally lost my critiqiue when I clicked submit--logged me out--:(...anyhow, just wanted to say that your haiku is like a snapshot of Christmas ^_^ I could even see it as a caption for a card or Christmas phot--you've really hit the nail on this one, the wonderment in children's eyes at Christmas are indeed priceless...thanks for sharing this, reallyy adds to the Christmas spirit about...:) |
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| Given By: |  CountryAngel
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| Critique Date: | 12/07/2009 |
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| Critique: | Sharon,
This as well as other writes you have done, is excellent.
A fresh xmas tree that smells of pine. I can remember when we used to have that, now we have artifical tree.
The children's eyes a aglow, are definitely adorned with yuletied magic..
My three year old grandson is so excited about xmas this year. Everything is an amazement for him.
Thanks for sharing and the rememberence. |
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| Given By: |  kuirq
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| Critique Date: | 12/05/2009 |
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| Critique: | I think that Christmas is such a magical season, especially for children, which totally makes sense since it's a celebration of the coming of the Christ child. Your haiku leaves much to think of, I especially like how the last line is written...as if you left it to the reader to think of what it could be that makes the children's eyes glow (could be innocence, wonder, excitement...or perhaps all combined). Thanks for sharing this, Sharon...makes one remember how simple and yet how special the essence of Christmas is. And I'm glad I can somehow relate to your first line..having been able to get a whiff of fresh pine for the first time (last year) in my almost 3 decades of existence on this earth :D! Merry Christmas! |
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