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New Beginnings
The final seconds of the passing year
rang out in frosty echoes through the night.
Disturbed from slumber, tiny snowflakes stirred
and showered in the moon’s blue-silver light.
With distant sound of revellers in song
befell a mood of melancholy heart,
where roads to nowhere rolled out dark and long
and neither moon nor stars could light impart.
Beyond the stroke of midnight, silent mist
in fingers twirled and beckoned right then left,
to travel forth toward an unknown tryst,
or walk the journey back to life bereft.
Unhappiness entwined with pain and tears
now fraternized with hope upon the breeze.
by bluemoon (Viewed 62 times)
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| Given By: |  CountryAngel
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| Critique Date: | 02/04/2010 |
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| Critique: | I always enjoy reading what you write. You have a way with words:)
I totaly agree with the twins about the first and last stanza.
Keep up writing and I will be reading :) |
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| Given By: |  Dennis
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| Critique Date: | 02/01/2010 |
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| Critique: | I totally enjoyed your sonnet, the images stir the mind. Eventhought it is sad, it encourages hope in the ending and I guess that ia all we really have. Your first stanza sets the stage with the images it creates, then sadness, then a faint glimmer of hope. You have a way with your words like the word weaver, a piece from raenie. |
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| Given By: |  raenie
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| Critique Date: | 02/01/2010 |
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| Critique: | Hi Sharon :)----:( I lost my review for the second time around--and on two separate occasions, nonetheless--I never do learn! have to get the habit of copying what I post here--*sigh* third time's a charm right?? Just wanted to say that I loved your sonnet as usual--you really have a knack for writing it and I totally enjoyed it, it has a hint of sadness, but it's still beautiful, and the contrast in your last couplet makes it even a better read since it hints at hope--one can always have that :) lovely write as always & I have to say that I also loved your first stanza--Ninna's right, you seem to do this effortlessly & with so much grace--the images that the first stanza evokes is just beautiful--again thanks for this lovely write :) sending this now and copying it!! yipes! it logged me out again when I clicked submit!! :( great thing I copied it this time! |
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| Given By: |  kuirq
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| Critique Date: | 01/29/2010 |
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| Critique: | It's a beautiful sonnet, I really love the first stanza, I think it's a pretty lovely opening. The imagery is enchanting, it's great how it wakes up the imagination (along with those snowflakes waking up!). The sonnet makes one ponder, how indeed, the onset of the new year does have a trace of sadness to it, a sort of bitter-sweetness, that it's not always about welcoming it with revelry. I loved the last two lines as well, gives one something to hold on to in order to look forward to the new year. Thank you for sharing this, Sharon :). |
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