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Diwata


In a place

where trees caress heaven's cheeks
where winds whisper wistfully,
sharing their secrets to those who care to listen...

In a place
where sun and moon meet, however fleeting,
where death and birth collide,
giving way to the cycle of life

There is She.

the Diwata

enchanting ebony tresses amidst fairest skin
unspeakable beauty manifested
with a voice that could melt the sun
guardian spirit of nature

There she resides quietly in the trees,
~the Narra, the Acacia, the Balete
a blessing for those who care for nature
yet wrath and curse await those who abuse it

You may hear her song echo in the breeze,
her sweet breath to cool the rivers,
her teardrops mingling with the dew...

Next time you take a nature's walk,
stop, listen and just feel---
close your eyes and when you get that tell-tale chill
through your bones, through your soul,

know that she is there,
watching your every move---

the Diwata



** Diwata is a nymph or even a nature goddess
in Philippine folklore, guardian spirits of nature;
they are human-like in form (not your tiny fairies)--
they are known to reside among trees---
the depiction here is of my own imagination ;)

**July 3, 2010 :)



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Given By: Sgt B
Critique Date:07/29/2010

Critique: Nikko, This was an enjoyable read. Right from the start you pulled me into the story line. Good flow as it went along. I liked the style you chose for this one. And now I know what a "Diwata" is. Thank you for sharing this one, it helped me enjoy my lunch break. ~Ron~
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Grade:Excellent


Given By:[Deleted User]
Critique Date:07/21/2010

Critique:Hi Nikko, I love your 'Diwata' poem for many reasons. I love that you teach us a little bit of Philippine folklore. I love the atmosphere you create for your poem, it's on two levels, soft and dreamy on the surface, but with an undercurrent of trepidation lest we upset the Diwata. Beautifully written, with a lovely sprinkling of alliteration. More please ~ Sharon :)
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:07/21/2010

Critique:I can sense your appreciation for nature and your write was lovely. I liked your presentation discribing nature then introducing Diwata as the watchful eye and protector of nature. Your discription of Diwata painted a sweet personage with a strong and predetermined destiny, just like Mother Nature. Enjoyed your write and your imagination.
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Grade:Excellent


 
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