CATEGORY: Haiku
Joy of Life
butterfly so fair,
flower dancing ‘pon the breeze
~children’s hearts delight
by PoetOfLight (Viewed 469 times)
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| Given By: |  raenie 
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| Critique Date: | 12/02/2007 |
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| Critique: | Simple yet eloquently written--in just a few words you were able to capture how much of a fanciful thing a butterfly can be, especially to children =) |
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| Given By: |  Katina
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| Critique Date: | 11/24/2007 |
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| Critique: | This is my favorite, so far. Worthy of being spotlighted. Check your mail for the award in the next 4-5 days. We sent them out on Friday, so be on the look out for it. Hope you like the ribbon, and please consider upgrading to the Serious Writer Account, then you can publish as many poems/or short stories as you can write. And you sure are talented. I hope that OSWS can get our Ezine out soon, then we can help promote writers on the site, while giving them a stronger publishing portfolio to share with agents and editors. Thanks again for sharing so much of your incredible poetry. |
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| Given By: | kuirq
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| Critique Date: | 11/12/2007 |
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| Critique: | You paint a great image...you kept true to the traditional theme of nature that haikus are known for. The limitation of having syllables of 5,7,5 is a great challenge, and you have succeeded in conveying a message with it. |
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| Given By: | Dennis
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| Critique Date: | 11/09/2007 |
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| Critique: | I guess I have not experienced too much of the poetry style of Hakiu but I like what you have here, all three of them. Short and sweet with an abundance of feeling. I am learning and glad I have the opportunity to be exposed to it. Thank you for your work. Dennis |
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