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Contemplation

Others have walked here,
though their voices are now silent.
Even so,
when I listen with my heart,
I still can hear them.
I can feel the tears they’ve cried
of both joy and sorrow.





They know me and I know them.

I, too, have had presence here before.
So I stand in reverent silence
at the center of the Rose of the Four Winds ...
at the center of the universe.
I know not where the winds will carry me.
With my hands uplifted
and my face toward the sun,
I give thanks for what was, what is, and what shall be.

The winds are dancing all around me
in a never-ending circle,
in an ever-flowing stream,
flowing in and out of my body
through my fingertips,
giving and receiving
through the top of my head
and the soles of my feet.

I am
a part of the Four Winds.
I am the stream.
 Death and birth are twin souls
as are dark and light.
No one knows the beginning nor the end.
I am nothing ... I am everything.
I am.



by PoetOfLight

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Given By: soulpath
Critique Date:03/01/2009

Critique:Blessed be for blessed thou art.  That piece is truly inspirational, Thank you. Mike

Grade:Excellent


Given By: stock.49
Critique Date:06/21/2008

Critique:I really enjoyed reading this one!  It brought out feelings of connectedness with the rest of humanity and our being alive.  I really liked how this came out in your word choice, which made the big picture apparent and placed us inside of it.  Great write. ~Andrew

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Luna Tique Fringe
Critique Date:02/29/2008

Critique:This is beautiful ... Deeply spiritual and very much in tune with my own spiritual path.  I'm not familiar with the Rose of Four Winds, but I can view it as a metaphor for the compass..perhaps, though on a grander scale.  This imparts a great sense of peace and well being. Excellantly written.

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Ale E
Critique Date:02/01/2008

Critique:Wow i thought this was absolutely excellent. The flow was great and overall a great poem. nicely done.

Grade:Excellent


Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:01/12/2008

Critique:This is a great poem. It makes for a wonderful read, very fluid and it really makes one contemplate about the wonder of existence.

Grade:Excellent


Given By:[Deleted User]
Critique Date:12/24/2007

Critique:I don't like a lot of the poetry that's written today, but this piece is absolutely superb, I could live in it and will like it for a long time - maybe longer than that. I really like ethereal stuff. I should say that I don't usually go overboard on anything, but it is the best I've read for many a long day. Nice one... David Lavisher.

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:11/24/2007

Critique: The images in this poem are so vivid and well written, it blows me away. The structure is also well done; I think you could get this published. I am working on a publishing guide, for writers on the site, in the middle of a college quarter. It should be completed by mid December. Let me know if you have had your work published before. I also suggest taking the poetry workshop, we offer it for free, and it may also be nice to share your work with new/beginning students of poetry. Great job!

Grade:Excellent


Given By: raenie
Critique Date:11/19/2007

Critique:I loved the imagery that you used in your poem and it also makes me feel like I too am a part of the Four winds =) We all are connected somehow--great writing! =)

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:11/10/2007

Critique:Extreamly well written and thought out, gets right down to the essence of life in a poetic sence. I love when I can read material such as this, very inspiring, thanks for posting. Dennis

Grade:Excellent


 
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