CATEGORY: Haiku
Mirage
among molten moons, mystical mirage unmasked music makes magic
by kuirq (Viewed 204 times)
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| Given By: |  PoetOfLight 
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| Critique Date: | 12/02/2007 |
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| Critique: | I really love the words you've written. They make harmony with the musical magic of the moon. |
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| Given By: | [Deleted User] |
| Critique Date: | 11/30/2007 |
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| Critique: | mmmmm the alliteration is beautiful! With so many mmmm's i feel like i just had pie =) This is a very nice piece of writing. My favorite line is the second one, "mystical mirage unmasked". This haiku reminds me of some of those beautiful pieces of artwork painted in geometric shapes for some reason. Kudos! |
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| Given By: |  Katina
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| Critique Date: | 11/17/2007 |
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| Critique: | Ooooh, this is a great example of alliteration. Well done indeed!
"I'm trying to catch up on reading" :) I'm also putting something on the front page tomorrow about you completing the class, congratulations on doing such a great job. You are an excellent student and an even better writer. I'm so proud of you!
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| Given By: | Dennis
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| Critique Date: | 11/12/2007 |
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| Critique: | It's a challenge but I think you are on to something. Isn't it nice to try something different. Seems to me as a teacher that we learn from what we see and experience and you are doing it. I think I will try my hand at it but I know it will drive me crazy, 5,7,5,. Good to see you trying new venues. Dennis |
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