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Mr Corvus









Through dense cocoons of swirling sleep
and drapes of silent night,
long winding dark brings shivers deep
neath skies bereft of light.
A haunting breeze begins to moan
as age-gnarled branches creak and groan,
a haunting breeze,
a haunting breeze,
exhales a breath as cold as stone.

Black feathers shroud a moonless sleep,
malignant auras swell,
dank undergrowth begins to creep
where dying leaves once fell.
A glint of eye from shadows bleak,
a hooded form, a corvine beak,
a glint of eye,
a glint of eye,
to prey upon the frail and weak.

Then plummet into wakeless sleep
amid satanic fire,
where life and hope will slowly seep
to hell’s eternal mire.
As midnight chimes and dreams turn sour,
observes the raven from his tower,
as midnight chimes,
as midnight chimes,
all souls await the witching hour.













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Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:04/28/2011

Critique:A dark yet haunting tale where all souls await the witching hour. Your words paint a morbid and bleek picture so elegantly, it gave me the chills. Great job!
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:04/24/2011

Critique:I learned something new today! I got curious where you got the name "Corvus". Thanks for the Latin 101!...and google ;) I'm loving how you've used dark words and yet it's not too spooky...just the right kind of chill! "dreams turn sour"...that phrase caught my eye and amusement...I never thought of it that way. I guess I can always count on you to open my eyes to something new...I tend to lean towards the cliched side of things. Hehe.  Our connection's been awful lately (that isn't a new thing at all)...and I can't view a new message here...is there another password to enter the forums, would you know? I've used up 4 out of 5 tries already. hehe. Happy easter! Catch you soon!
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Grade:Excellent


 
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