CATEGORY: Haiku
Seasons
Dew dripping flowers Fall quickly on orange leaves Waiting for snowfall
by Dennis (Viewed 255 times)
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| Given By: |  Katina 
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| Critique Date: | 02/12/2008 |
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| Critique: | I like the action of this piece. Things are happening, just as they are in nature.
Good job Dennis! |
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| Given By: |  Sgt B
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| Critique Date: | 02/07/2008 |
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| Critique: | This reminds me of Ohio in the fall. I use to live there in the 70s . I always think of the Kirtland park as I would go there to go out onto the ledges where you can see all the way to the lake, on a clear day. Thanx for you bring back those memories.
~Ron~ |
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| Given By: | CountryAngel
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| Critique Date: | 02/06/2008 |
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| Critique: | The fall is my favorite time of the year !!
In PA.. it's a beautiful....
Very nice.... |
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| Given By: |  kuirq
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| Critique Date: | 02/04/2008 |
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| Critique: | It's a wonderful depicition of autumn. I haven't witnessed or experienced autumn personally, but you use words that are very descriptive, making it very easy for a person such as myself to experince it through words. Great haiku! |
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| Given By: |  david lavisher
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| Critique Date: | 01/27/2008 |
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| Critique: | I used to wonder why everyone seems to prefer writing about autumn. But it's the slow dying of the year and faded colours that we as painters can't truly reproduce, that do it. The ending of a colourful vibrant year, perhaps to look back on -- a sort of comfortable-with-yourself feeling in the peace and quiet of nature. It's well produced here as befits Haiku which was the true, original use of this writing medium - or so I'm told. Good stuff. |
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| Given By: |  wewerethere1
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| Critique Date: | 01/26/2008 |
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| Critique: | The scene painted is so clear and true. I think this is your second best haiku, just me though. Thanks for the read. |
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| Given By: | lecanis
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| Critique Date: | 01/25/2008 |
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| Critique: | This haiku made me smile, especially because there is a lot of snow where I am now, and it reminded me of the other seasons that will come back someday! You have quite a talent for haiku! |
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