Please...., let us live. - Haiku : One-Stop Write Shop

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Please...., let us live.

a car bomb explodes

shattering peace at its best

maim, fear, hate and death

by Dennis (Viewed 243 times)

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Given By:	duckiesgirl96
Critique Date:	07/23/2008

Critique:	I think it is short but it makes a point! Good Job!!!!
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Given By:	madaddicted
Critique Date:	02/05/2008

Critique:	Very strong. Straight and to the point. The only thing I see is to change "it's" to "its".
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Given By:	wewerethere1
Critique Date:	01/26/2008

Critique:	Nothing more I could say. Everyone else has already said it. It is perfect and truthful. Thanks for the amazing read.


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Given By:	kuirq
Critique Date:	01/12/2008

Critique:	A very powerful piece that rings so true. Aside from the typo in "its", this haiku is wonderfully written.
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Given By:	raenie
Critique Date:	01/08/2008

Critique:	Wow. Iraq and its children just suddenly popped in my head after reading this. A very powerful piece that sums up the horror and chaos of war and uprising.


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