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To My Boys

   

If I should die before my time

I just want my boys to no

Mummy didn’t want to go

I wanted to stay and watch you as you grow

I wanted to be there for every minute

Never forget that your mummy loves you so

 

Brad, you are so special

Never loose what’s in your heart

You’ve been my best friend and my support

Without you I would have fallen apart

 

Brock you have been my spirit

I love who you’ve grown to be

You’re so special, warm and funny

In you I see a huge part of me

 

Beau you are so young

But a little man so full of love

Against all odds you came into my life

I truly believe you were sent to me from god up above

 

You guys go on and live a life

That you no I would be proud for you to live

Never doubt the love I have for you

And don’t forget to sometimes give

 

I’ll be watching you every step of the way

And I’ll try to protect you all from harm

If the going gets tuff and it all seems too much

Close your eyes and you’ll feel my guiding arms

 

Don’t ever let fear take your freedom away

And always look at tomorrow as another day

 

Mistakes will happen here and there

Just own up and most people will be fair

 

Your brothers and brothers should always stick together

Never let that change, family is forever.

 

Be honest, give respect and you’ll get it back in return

Never think you’re to smart, everyone has something to learn

 

When you find love treat her right, don’t ever make her feel second best

Because if you find true love and cherish it, love will guide you through every test

 

I no you’ll miss me sometimes and feel a little let down

Just look up at the nights sky, I’m the brightest star

Where ever your life’s journey takes you

I’ll never be to far.

 

 



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Given By: Alexgia
Critique Date:03/18/2009

Critique:I am a mom of five and I can hear the love for your children all through this piece. I love the fact that their names are in this making it so much more special and something they can keep forever. Beautifully done.  

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Ale E
Critique Date:05/11/2008

Critique:Wow this is beautifully written. I thought it was so sweet how you incorporated your sons name in this poem...it just made it more personal and meaningful in my opinion! I absolutely love this. It sort of reminds me of how my mom is always there and how much i love her! nicely Written! ale xox

Grade:Excellent


Given By: CountryAngel
Critique Date:03/02/2008

Critique:I\'m new at this, but after reading your poem, I just had to tell you that your words are so beautiful.  There is definitely alot of love in your heart for your son\'s. Thank you for sharing !  

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:01/18/2008

Critique:As a mother myself this poem speaks to me in a very personal way. The love you feel for your children shine through in this piece! A job well done. There are some small editing things, (god-God), (grow in the first stanza--grew) and possibly a comma after "Brad" aside from the small things, I feel that your poem will be treasured for years to come, by your children, and their children and possibly their children as well! Words are so important in our lives, and when we can take what is in our hearts to give to others, especially to the ones most treasured, than the words become more than mere ink on a page, the words become another great memory-- Good Job~
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Grade:Good


Given By:[Deleted User]
Critique Date:01/08/2008

Critique:a heart felt poem that brought tears to my eyes.

Grade:Good


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:01/08/2008

Critique:You displayed a mothers love, a strong influence and a powerful guide on those she loves. The bond is unbreakable. Nice poem and good job. You reminded me of my mom in respect to her nine children, the love was always there for each and everyone of us. Dennis

Grade:Good


 
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