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Self

Who am I?

A question commonly asked.

The answers we seek,

as we struggle within.

To define our self,

what must we do?

When will it become clear?

That we are, who we say we are.

Life's battle

Is hardly fought outside,

but within.

We seek to capture our self.

We torture the mind and body,

trying to find the answers.

Shocking yourself to finally realize,

There are no prisoners of war in this fight.

Only prisons

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Given By:	SweetSluyter231
Critique Date:	08/28/2009

Critique:	This piece is touching. It makes you question your own life. I really enjoyed. I'll admit it can be improved but just the same I am sure most anyone who read it would enjoy it. This peice should be entered in another contest because it's REALLY good.


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Given By:	jamesanthony
Critique Date:	06/08/2009

Critique:	Excellent poem I really enjoy it. Keep up the great!


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Given By:	L.J. Boldyrev
Critique Date:	05/31/2009

Critique:	Beautifully written. At this moment in my life it really hits a personal note for me.


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Given By:	soulpath
Critique Date:	03/01/2009

Critique:	When we strip away all the trappings we hide behind or that we are left with is our basic insecurity , self doubt and fear of not being accepted....Thus work sums that up elequaintly..Well Done. Mike


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Given By:	Steven
Critique Date:	07/22/2008

Critique:	Amazing. You manage to take the self-doubt and internal struggle plaguing many today, and put into words. Simple, clear language that penetrates straight to the heart. The choice of words is excellent, and the way you put them together...wow. I almost had tears in my eyes. Well done, Jester. Great job.


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Given By:	Apparition
Critique Date:	06/15/2008

Critique:	It's funny. When I clicked ont his title to read and started reading it, I could hear your voice saying it. I guess this jsut really sounds like somethign you'd write. My favorite line is the very last one. It's like you've taught us this very important lesson and then suddenly you've shocked us all with the realization that no one saw coming. The kind of ending that I like. The more you think about it, the more you realize how true it really is.


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Given By:	[Deleted User]
Critique Date:	04/04/2008

Critique:	My favorite stanza, " Life's battle, hardly fought outside, but within We seek to capture our self." This poem speaks to me in a very personal way. Good job! I think you could make it stronger by adding a few more stanzas.


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Given By:	Ale E
Critique Date:	02/01/2008

Critique:	Wow i loved this piece. Very true indeed as well. The flow well flowed so nicely. Very nicely done my fellow poet. ale xox


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Given By:	Dennis
Critique Date:	01/08/2008

Critique:	Wow Jester, you out did yourself with this one. A question we all have to fight through to finally realize we are all we have in this world of so many challenges. It is OK to be who you are, as long as others are not injured in the process. A lot of thought here, most would not even bother to take this one on. One of your better writes. Dennis


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