CATEGORY: Haiku
[Relentless Writing 7 Tokens]
Peace as one
Clouds drift by blending, joining, creating Now stronger as one.
by Trene (Viewed 268 times)
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| Given By: |  auroragirl96 
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| Critique Date: | 07/30/2008 |
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| Critique: | Awesome poem! I totally feel the power of when you wrote it! Good job! |
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| Given By: |  Sgt B
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| Critique Date: | 03/24/2008 |
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| Critique: | With a possibility of rain? Very tranquil write for sure. I enjoyed the memory this one brought back to me. As a child I loved to Cloud gaze. Think I'll go out this week end & try it again. ;) |
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| Given By: |  kuirq
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| Critique Date: | 03/14/2008 |
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| Critique: | I have always loved to observe the clouds...you have described it beautifully in this haiku. Your title is interesting too, personally, it provided me with a strong afterthought that I feel peace as I look up at the sky. The clouds become one, and yet sometimes, I feel one with the clouds when I look up! |
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| Given By: |  Katina
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| Critique Date: | 03/11/2008 |
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| Critique: | I like this haiku! The last line seals the deal. Good work. |
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| Given By: | Steven
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| Critique Date: | 02/09/2008 |
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| Critique: | I liked how you created a powerful image of massive clouds changing shape, joining together, and emerging anew with only a few words. Excellent haiku. |
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| Given By: | Ronin Sumomo
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| Critique Date: | 01/17/2008 |
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| Critique: | Extremely simple yet extremely powerful. You show the capacity of a Haiku. |
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| Given By: | Dennis
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| Critique Date: | 01/11/2008 |
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| Critique: | You create memories for all of us with your write. I can see your vision at this very moment, Good job, Dennis |
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