[Printer Friendly Writing Display] Printer Friendly Writing Display
CATEGORY: Haiku Bookmark and Share


[Relentless Writing 7 Tokens]

Peace as one

Clouds drift by

blending, joining, creating

Now stronger as one.



by Trene (Viewed 658 times)

You must log-on in order to critique and grade any writings. Login here.


Other Critiques of this Work
Given By: Hendrick13
Critique Date:02/08/2009
Critique:Great haiku.  You can tell the power.
Grade:Good


Given By: auroragirl96
Critique Date:07/30/2008
Critique:Awesome poem! I totally feel the power of when you wrote it! Good job!
Grade:Good


Given By: Sgt B
Critique Date:03/24/2008
Critique:With a possibility of rain? Very tranquil write for sure. I enjoyed the memory this one brought back to me. As a child I loved to Cloud gaze. Think I'll go out this week end & try it again. ;)
Grade:Good


Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:03/14/2008
Critique:I have always loved to observe the clouds...you have described it beautifully in this haiku. Your title is interesting too, personally, it provided me with a strong afterthought that I feel peace as I look up at the sky. The clouds become one, and yet sometimes, I feel one with the clouds when I look up!
[View Replies]
Grade:Good


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:03/11/2008
Critique:I like this haiku! The last line seals the deal. Good work.
Grade:Good


Given By: Steven
Critique Date:02/09/2008
Critique:I liked how you created a powerful image of massive clouds changing shape, joining together, and emerging anew with only a few words. Excellent haiku.
[View Replies]
Grade:Good


Given By: Ronin Sumomo
Critique Date:01/17/2008
Critique:Extremely simple yet extremely powerful. You show the capacity of a Haiku.
[View Replies]
Grade:Excellent


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:01/11/2008
Critique:You create memories for all of us with your write. I can see your vision at this very moment, Good job, Dennis
[View Replies]
Grade:Good


 
One-Stop Write Shop LLC Copyright 2007-2008
visitors since November 2007!
1279 total writings, and growing!
About Us | Privacy Policy | Site Disclaimer | Copyright | Donations | Link to Us | Site Map
Designed by Developjet
Members Only
Writers Station
Logon
User Action Menu View Portfolio View Public Profile Send Private Message
User Action Menu View Portfolio View Public Profile Send Private Message
User Action Menu View Portfolio View Public Profile Send Private Message
User Action Menu View Portfolio View Public Profile View Blog Send Private Message
User Action Menu View Portfolio View Public Profile View Blog Send Private Message Send IM via Yahoo Send IM via MSN
User Action Menu View Portfolio View Public Profile Send Private Message Send IM via MSN
User Action Menu View Portfolio View Public Profile Send Private Message
User Action Menu View Portfolio View Public Profile View Blog Send Private Message