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The Dragon's Lair ( Long Epic )

I am dispatched by the Elves, a dragon I’m to kill.


Gold and Silver is my payment, my pack I am to fill.


I ride to ancient lands, where man no longer lives.


But dragons do fly freely, lives are theirs to take or give.


The land is scorched and burning, smoking from the fire.


The plains are way too low, I must climb up higher.


Up into the mountains, the lair I must now reach.


I know all the answers, to the lessons that they teach.


How dragons they are ancient, and wise beyond belief.


If you see one and survive, it’s more then a relief.


I make it up the mountain, and walk into a cave.


I feel an evil presence there, yet still I must be brave.


I smell the burning sulfur, they eat to make their fire.


But greed leads me on, for a kingdom’s my desire.


I come upon the dragon, sleeping soundly on his nest.


Gold, silver, and jewels, are piled around his breast.


He awoke and made a gurgling noise, one I’ll not soon forget.


His eyes are whirling madly, and I can feel the threat.


“Why are you here human?” He roared just to inquire.


The last thing that I see, are the flames of dragon fire.


 


~ Dragon fire ~


~ Dragon fire ~


~ Dying from the heat
~


 


We were told of a hero, one the Elves did hire.


Tried to kill a dragon, was killed by dragon fire.


Heard the tale in a tavern, by the keeper of the inn.


“We can kill this creature.” I said with a grin.


It is a mighty journey, but we make it to the lair.


Two horses we do lose, our equipment does show wear.


But I find a magic lute, by a pathway as we climb.


It's beautiful beyond compare, once I cleaned off all the
grime.


We hope the music will entrance, the huge and mighty beast.


I do not wish to become, the main item of a feast.


We find the dragon eating, his forelimb on a head.


Ripping flesh off of bones, I hope his pray is dead.


I play the lute to soothe the beast, but nothing does occur.


He is on me in an instant, I see nothing but a blur.


“I have a riddle for you.” He crooned into my ear.


He whispers to me his riddle, I then shake with fear.


“What is it you can keep, after giving it away?”


I don’t know the answer, I don’t know what to say.


I am frozen here with fear, like ice over mire.


Then I’m scorching hot, consumed by dragon fire.


 


~ Dragon fire ~


~ Dragon fire ~


~ Covers like a sheet
~


 


The reputation of a creature, spread throughout the land.


Multitudes of people gather, to try and make a stand.


But every one has faltered, every one has failed.


No one here is wiser, then this creature that is tailed.


He asks them all a riddle, the answer they should know.


He’s trying just to teach them, but they will never grow.


They only want to kill him, one day they may succeed.


He’s giving them pure knowledge, something that they need.


He’s older then the mountains, say the rumors that do fly.


Men just keep on going there, some of them will die.


Man now has encampments, at the bottom of the peak.


They pay to go up there, to hear the dragon speak.


They refuse to heed his warnings, won’t listen to his words.


None of them are noble men, all of them are curds.


He must be getting tired, for some have now escaped.


He probably just let them go, their mouths stuck all agape.


A boy has now been chosen, for this mission to conclude.


Ballads sung of heroes lost, his name they will include.


He’s started up the mountain, I hear his mother weep.


I can see that he is frightened, but his promise he does
keep.


 


~ Dragon’s lair ~


~ Dragon’s lair ~


~ Smells like a
battlefield ~


 


As I leave my mother crying, for the son that she has lost.


I think I need to win here, kill the dragon at all cost.


I wonder how they chose me, to go out upon this quest?


I haven’t got a clue, I’ll have to do my best.


With a sword around my waist, I feel just like a knight.


Outside I’m very calm, but inside I feel fright.


I stop to pick up dragon scale, to make myself a shield.


Protection from the dragon fire, so my sword I can wield.


I make it to the dragon’s lair, the smell is very foul.


I see a dragon’s wing tip, I hear a dragon’s growl.


A burst of flame takes over, when the dragon does exhale.


The flame never touches me, not hat, hide, or chain mail.


Did I hear correctly? Did the dragon really laugh?


Was that a smile upon his face? It was hook shaped like a
gaff.


“Come closer boy” he said, “You’re a smart one I can tell.”


“By the way you protect yourself, by the way you smell.”


“So answer this here question, if you have the wits.”


“But answer incorrectly, you’ll be thrown in the pits.”


“What is it you can keep, after giving it away?”


“Why, your word!
I shouted boldly, and proudly walked away.


 


~ Dragon scale ~


~ Dragon scale ~


~ To make the perfect
shield ~


 


I tell the boy to stop, he can’t just walk away.


The answer to my question, is the first test of the day.


Man is taking over, just by what he knows.


We are dying out, yet their population grows.


We need a new young human, to train and to teach.


To teach the ancient things, like science, magic, speech.


As I gaze upon the boy, I can tell he’s pure of heart.


Now he needs to pack his things, get ready to depart.


I can tell he is no glutton, no gold tries to steal.


I tell him to take some, it was part of the deal.


He wants to see his mother, just to say good-bye.


I tell him it’s not possible, I think he wants to cry.


This boy is the perfect man, to be the world’s first wizard.


Man will soon forget us, call me a flying lizard.


He packs up his gear, and puts it on my back.


Just a real cheap sword, and a scruffy looking pack.


I tell him of a king, who has not yet been born.


Whose name will be Arthur, he’ll be a mighty lord.


“He will call you Merlin, seek out your advise.”


“Until the day that wizards too, will come to their demise.”




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Given By: Katina
Critique Date:07/31/2008

Critique:Ah, a breath taking epic! The first line of the poem gives the reader information about what the poem is about, and helps to develop the character early on, "I am dispatched by the Elves, a dragon I'm to kill." This lines helps to draw in the reader. What is going to happen next? Writing an epic is not an easy task, you have to know how the story will unfold, or at least a basic outline to keep the lines flowing and the rhyme schem in tact. I cannot give any suggestions on how you could make this piece better, other than the use of images, which is what you are working on now. Good luck finding an illustrated to bring out this piece, and many hats off for winning the 1st Place Grand Prize in our Annual Writing Competition! We hope that finding a publisher for this epic will be soon. This poem is elegible to be published in the OSWS new E Zine Magazine 2008/09 Thank you again Ron, Congratulations from all of us at the One Stop Write Shop.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By:[Deleted User]
Critique Date:05/21/2008

Critique:wow this is powerful taking all on a magical adventure i love the ending that the dragon was not killed by anyone and the mentioning of the elves is wonderful
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:03/01/2008

Critique:I have read your story at least twenty times during judging and all, and yet, I come back to read it again. It amazes me how you put it all together and delivered an ending to ponder about the ages lived. Very pubishable, have you submitted to publishing companies, you should, takes some research to find a likely fit but by all means, submit, submit, submit that is my advise. Dennis
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Trene
Critique Date:02/21/2008

Critique:I like this poem so much. I cant imagine that I'd change a thing. from the very first few lines you just have to read until the end. I really enjoy writing but rarely enjoy reading but this was a great read. The rhyme is fantastic to and the story line fasanating. top work and congradulations on your win - certainly well deserved.
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Grade:Excellent


Given By: Ale E
Critique Date:02/03/2008

Critique:Wow! This is a very very good write. No wonder you have won! I just loved how this epic is long, with rhyme, and yet doesn't sound forced at all. The flow is great as well. I love the story with in it too! This is just brilliant. I dont' think i would change a thing! Very good write my fellow poet! ale xox
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Grade:Excellent


 
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