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enchanted evening
candles’ flickering light glows softly upon skin that tingles with the touch of feathered fingertips, tracing circles that cause sighs of passion to ignite.
lips know how to moisten the edges of the circles, the brush of breath being poetry whispered on the canvas, giving titillation to the flame.
a gentle bite now and then changes the pace of heart rhythms, raising the temperature.
the juices of ripened love begin to flow and the stream beckons for the two to join as one.
bodies rise and fall like ocean waves seeking that same sweet shore of ecstasy to crash upon simultaneously.
once the dream has reached fruition, mingled auras of souls electrify each other in a way that neither can truly describe.
the last steps of their dance arrived as they lay, replete, savouring the taste of salt lingering on tongues that traded pleasures, looking forward to those first notes of their next song.
by PoetOfLight
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| Given By: | [Deleted User] |
| Critique Date: | 10/21/2008 |
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| Critique: | Can you please add a rating to this poem. Although, the material is in the correct category, users under the age of 13 & 18 are still able to view this, unless it has been added with the proper rating. To add a rating, go to the Members Only area, click on My Writing, and open the poem. Click on the (R) for this particular rating and then click Update Writing.
Thank you for your attention. Sorry for any confusing. --Katina I will return to the piece to add a proper rating once you have corrected this. Thank you. |
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| Grade: | Needs Revised |
| Given By: |  Passionspromise
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| Critique Date: | 03/19/2008 |
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| Critique: | Hello indeed this piece is hot. I am a erotic writer on another spot and well, this is the best i have seen in quite some time. I appreciated this great read. Your rhythm and flow were perfect. A masterpiece of love and romance done with perfection. Great job.
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| Given By: |  Dennis
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| Critique Date: | 01/29/2008 |
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| Critique: | First of all, congratulations on your win, good work. Enchanted Evening is another good piece of work, universal love that we all pursue and you tell it so well. Thanks for all the writes, we enjoy reading them. Dennis |
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