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enchanted evening

candles’ flickering light
glows softly upon
skin that tingles with the touch
of feathered fingertips,
tracing circles that cause
sighs of passion to ignite.

lips know how
to moisten the edges
of the circles,
the brush of breath
being poetry
whispered on the canvas,
giving titillation to the flame.

a gentle bite now
and then changes
the pace of
heart rhythms, raising
the temperature.

the juices of
ripened love begin
to flow and
the stream beckons
for the two
to join as one.

bodies rise and fall
like ocean waves
seeking that same sweet shore
of ecstasy
to crash upon
simultaneously.

once the dream
has reached fruition,
mingled auras of souls
electrify each other
in a way that
neither can truly describe.

the last steps of
their dance arrived
as they lay, replete,
savouring  the
taste of salt lingering
on tongues
that traded pleasures,
looking forward to
those first notes of
their next song.




by PoetOfLight

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Given By:[Deleted User]
Critique Date:10/21/2008

Critique:Can you please add a rating to this poem. Although, the material is in the correct category, users under the age of 13 & 18 are still able to view this, unless it has been added with the proper rating. To add a rating, go to the Members Only area, click on My Writing, and open the poem. Click on the (R) for this particular rating and then click Update Writing. Thank you for your attention. Sorry for any confusing. --Katina I will return to the piece to add a proper rating once you have corrected this. Thank you.

Grade:Needs Revised


Given By: Passionspromise
Critique Date:03/19/2008

Critique:Hello indeed this piece is hot. I am a erotic writer on another spot and well, this is the best i have seen in quite some time. I appreciated this great read. Your rhythm and flow were perfect. A masterpiece of love and romance done with perfection. Great job. PassionsPromise

Grade:Excellent


Given By: Dennis
Critique Date:01/29/2008

Critique:First of all, congratulations on your win, good work. Enchanted Evening is another good piece of work, universal love that we all pursue and you tell it so well. Thanks for all the writes, we enjoy reading them. Dennis

Grade:Excellent


 
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