| CATEGORY: Romance Writing |
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where shadows tease
i want you by moonlight
a waltz in the garden
i want you by firelight
passion’s heat caressing
i want you by starlight
with dreams in your eyes
i want you by candlelight
where shadows tease the walls
by PoetOfLight
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| Given By: |   astaclara@yahoo.com 
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| Critique Date: | 04/01/2009 |
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| Critique: | See, if I were a girl reading a poem like this sent by a boy i would be very very touched (if I liked that boy). But I was hoping there would be one last line to bring the whole thing to a close, a line that would bring it all together. |
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| Given By: | [Deleted User] |
| Critique Date: | 02/28/2008 |
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| Critique: | It can't be more romantic than that, I can add a small alabaster table, single red rose and a swirl of soft sweet perfume to each 'wanting' and it does it for me. I don't know if you've heard of Jack Vettriano the unusual romantic artist, your poem reminds me very much of his work. Strong imagery works every time for me. Good stuff. |
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