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Proud Son

We watched the airplane fly way up high,

until it reached the light blue sky.

We hugged and kissed him before he left,

we waved good bye and said God Bless.

Iraq he's coming, be strong and have faith,

you have all our prayers we know you'll be safe.

Proud of you, yes we are

whether your near or far,

We love you dear son, and can't hardly wait

until we see your smile in front of our face..

Love, mom and Dad.

by CountryAngel (Viewed 350 times)

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Given By:	countryangelsson
Critique Date:	09/08/2008

Critique:	good job mom i love it who is it though???? love your son angelo
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Given By:	Ale E
Critique Date:	05/11/2008

Critique:	Aww how sweet! I have had quite a number of family members in Iraq and still do. I am proud of every one of them. It fills me with pride! Nicely written and expressed! ale xox


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Given By:	Trene
Critique Date:	02/21/2008

Critique:	What a beautiful feeling to share with us all. Thank you.


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Given By:	PoetOfLight
Critique Date:	02/19/2008

Critique:	A truly heartwrenching write. Blessings to you and your family.


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Given By:	Katina
Critique Date:	02/12/2008

Critique:	I remember reading this in your email, this poem is a lot more developed, good job! I see a lot of potential in your writing Diane. "A hidden talent indeed!"


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Given By:	Sgt B
Critique Date:	02/07/2008

Critique:	Tell your son I said Thank you! I feel your pain as our son has finally come home after his second tour. Great emotion given here to the reader. I am sure all parents relate. Good job.


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Given By:	Dennis
Critique Date:	02/06/2008

Critique:	Your poem comes from the heart, many mother's sons are out there defending our Country. That tearful goodby, the long wait, with God delivering him at your doorstep to live life and move on. Good write, Dennis


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Given By:	madaddicted
Critique Date:	02/05/2008

Critique:	I can definitely relate to this one. In fact, I just wrote a poem not long ago that's similar to this one. My sister just went off to Iraq and has been there for about 2 weeks now. This is a very nice poem and I hope you will see your son very soon.
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