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Petals of Rose
Petals of rose fall one by one,
A signal that its journey's done.
Would I but have such dignity
As my last breath flies free from me.
by PoetOfLight
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| Given By: |   soulpath 
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| Critique Date: | 03/06/2009 |
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| Critique: | I beautifuly written piecde and one gratefuly I an relate to as my mother died 3 years ago and ,as was her wish, kept her dignity |
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| Given By: |   raenie
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| Critique Date: | 05/12/2008 |
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| Critique: | I loved this so much that I had to read it like 4 times. The image of rose petals gently falling just stuck on my mind and you worded it beautifully that it was just like a breath of fresh air after being stifled. What you wrote here also holds true for me, that I sure am glad that I viewed your poem, thanks PoetofLight... |
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| Given By: | [Deleted User] |
| Critique Date: | 02/20/2008 |
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| Critique: | This is so beautiful, it made me cry a little. My mum has been seriously ill in intensive care for 5 months now & so much of that time has been very distressing. I would like to think that if we were to lose her it would be like this, gentle and dignified. The only thing I would change if it were my poem would be to replace flies with flows in the last line, it seems more gentle & fitting to the rest of the poem. Having said that it is beautiful just the way it is. Thanks. |
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