CATEGORY: Romance Writing


The Letter part 1


 I got a crush on you, I dont know your name, where your from? I dont have the slightest idea. You sit three seats ahead of me. The only time I see your face is when I walk into class, your sitting so beautifully. Smile from ear to ear. To think I would catch your name during attendence....... I never make it to class on time, always late. Im writing you this letter, to let you know my emotions.                                                                               I'd love to know your name, I bet it has two syllables. "Gorgeous", Let me walk you to class, I can even hold your books."Helpful", Or maybe I can pick you up for school? "Driver", see I can adapt for you. Get to know you, understand you , love you, explore you, (excuse me). Mr. Macunahu is coming, write back.




by crazyss (Viewed 219 times)

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Given By: Katina
Critique Date:03/22/2008

Critique:Good start here! Do you write short stories? You have a very good prose style for writing. Hope you enter the writing competition, I think you would do well in it.  The ending is terrific.  --Kat

Grade:Good


 
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