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[Relentless Writing 20 Tokens]
Cycles!
Orange leaves slowly
Fall on soil that gives them life
Replenishing green
by Dennis (Viewed 528 times)
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| Given By: |   Katina 
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| Critique Date: | 08/09/2009 |
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| Critique: | Great Dennis. Now, since you enjoy a good riddle, I have a haiku challenge for you. Use the poem above to create a riddle. In may haiku forms, creating a riddle, a little mystery out of the haiku is most effective. Or, using a twist at the end. Good work! |
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| Given By: |   tressyjane
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| Critique Date: | 06/01/2009 |
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| Critique: | Neat, I like it alot. I have never heard of this style.....I gotta check it out.
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| Given By: |  madaddicted
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| Critique Date: | 06/01/2009 |
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| Critique: | A beautiful haiku about life and nature. |
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| Given By: |  raenie
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| Critique Date: | 04/05/2009 |
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| Critique: | Very nicely written! Nature's cycle is indeed wondrous--what goes around comes around and your haiku depicted it really well :) thanks for sharing Dennis! |
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| Given By: |  Sgt B
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| Critique Date: | 04/08/2008 |
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| Critique: | Nice, I have only recently starting even readind the haiku style. This one tells the story ove life itself in a parable. Well that's what I got. Good write Dennis, good job!
~Ron~ |
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| Given By: |  CountryAngel
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| Critique Date: | 04/07/2008 |
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| Critique: | I like this Hauki Den :)
That's how it is in PA..
Life goes on... |
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| Given By: | bluemoon
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| Critique Date: | 04/07/2008 |
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| Critique: | Amidst decay there is new life. I like this haiku, it has a simple quality to it. love the idea of replenishing green. |
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