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It's The Phantom Tragedy
The pain from this life of his,
He's the Phantom from within.
Smiling through his tears,
And crying without Sin,
With all of his life to bare,
He's the Phantom from within.
When writhing from painful stares,
He's the Phantom from within.
He's dealnig with death filled glares,
He's the Phantom From within.
Smiling through the tears,
And crying without sin
My Tragedy for those held dear,
He's the Phantom From within.
He's dealing with so much fear,
He's the Phantom from within.
From his past the demon's leer,
He's the Phantom From within
Smiling through the tears,
And crying without sin
Tragedy for the feelings,
Tragedy for my life.
Tragedy for those I loved,
And Tragedy filled with strife.
Understand me by the Phantom,
For the Phantom of my tragedy.
If you look and then you'll see,
A whole new side of me.
So don't judge me on what you see,
Judge on feeling's and emotions.
My Phantoms are as wide,
With the depth of the ocean.
When you think of me
This is my Phantom Tragedy
by The Phantom Tragedy
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| Given By: |  soulpath
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| Critique Date: | 03/01/2009 |
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| Critique: | One small point I think there is typo line 9, I make hundreds, Anexcellent piece, the use a repitition, the line crying without sin I love, removes guilt from the emotions so that which has been felt not self pittying, very enjoyable Thanks Mike |
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| Given By: |  Ale E
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| Critique Date: | 12/27/2007 |
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| Critique: | Wow this is very good. I think this is my favorite of all poems that i read of yours so far. Very interesting indeed. I'm a fan as well. |
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| Given By: |  Katina
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| Critique Date: | 08/22/2007 |
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| Critique: | Love the way you use repetition in this poem! Super write, you sure are poetic. Keep up the fantastic work. I am a fan~! |
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