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CATEGORY: Haiku


Sky

The sky is dark now


stars shining bright with sparkle


amazing moon light


 



by CountryAngel (Viewed 148 times)

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Given By: kuirq
Critique Date:07/19/2008
Critique:It's nice how you wrote it in the present tense. This way, you made the reader see the sky with you, capturing the image of the sky as you saw it.  Wonderful imagery indeed!
Grade:Excellent


Given By: Katina
Critique Date:06/18/2008
Critique:4 Stars! Beautiful poem.
Grade:Excellent


Given By: raenie
Critique Date:06/18/2008
Critique:A very wonderful haiku you have here, Diane :) I really liked the 2nd line, of how you used sparkle as an adjective and not as a verb...pretty much descriptive of our sky right now actually (it's a full moon tonight) & the nightsky is just amazing...
Grade:Excellent


Given By: bluemoon
Critique Date:05/08/2008
Critique:Hi Diane, nice image here. I like the moon & the stars, something magical & mystical about them.
Grade:Good


 
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