CATEGORY: Free Verse


Struggle

The words you try to say,

are cold and hard.

The love you claim,

Is felt, but restrained.



I give you everything I have,

but all I get back is half a cup.

With all I give

I hoped it would be overflowing.



The days I'm beaten,

my pain and hate is silent.

I hold myself from exploding

The pressure forever building.



All I ask is for you to listen.

Not give me cold lectures.

I know it could be worse,

but I'm still in misery.



I know you can't see it.

That I'm dying inside.

With all the pressure

holding up the world.



Can't this jester have a day

A day with no mask or tricks,

and be real for you to see

how weak I am from the wear.



From all the times

I hold you tight

telling you it's alright.

While convincing myself I'm right.



You don't see the pain

the worry, the doubt.

I have to be strong

to lift you up.



I need a hand too

Just so I know it's there.

I'll be strong for you

If you can hold my hand.



by Jester (Viewed 307 times)

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Given By: Asuka_Engel
Critique Date:05/23/2008

Critique:This poem really hits me deep. I think it would even if I wasn't as close to you as I am. It really does show that two people who love each other need to support and care for the other equally, instead of only half effort. This actually leaves me feeling rather sad. Good job, as always =)

Grade:Excellent


 
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