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IllusionI

Written 09-92

A feeling within keeps me from writing,

something holds me back.

The thought "Illusion".

Is it all an illusion?

I awoke with that cloud in my mind,

a mist, heavy yet not,

just there.

I asked myself,

"Why this morning, what is different than yesterday?

"Why this morning, why today?

Being aware helps it dissipate,

Understanding eases the conflict within.

The mist begins to expose itself as doubt and fear.

The cloud evaporates as I believe in me.

The illusion is doubt and fear,

what is here is real,

my time now, this minute.

I look about me and feel warm and pleasant,

the music is nice, the fire is crackling, the animals are sleeping

"The illusion",

is the doubt in myself I awoke with this morning.

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Given By:	Alexgia
Critique Date:	04/22/2009

Critique:	I really enjoyed this. So easy to fall into that feeling then looking outward pulls us back. Doubt and Fear plauge us all. Very nicely written.


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Given By:	Dennis
Critique Date:	05/17/2008

Critique:	Beautiful, just shows me as the reader that we all get swayed at times, lost in our own minds, caught up in our own condition and fail to look beyond. Then, like you say, we find inner piece within ourselfs and we know our chosen path works for us. Once again, we take control and sometimes that glides us back to illusion. A circle perhaps? I enjoyed reading your write and as you can see, it spurred my philosphical interest, thought provoking, thank you. Dennis


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