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When They Are Tough…

 When things are tough,

The mind is but rough

Like a boy’s head full of dandruff.  

Oh, lacked is that concentration

Desired for a deep penetration

That results in high production. 

 Hear me you, I thus speak;

When this is at its peak

Your trade of passion, go pick. 

 Joy comes in what best you know.

Then you would relax and snore;

Life is best of any show… 



by Musimwa

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Critique Date:08/21/2007

Critique:This poem speaks to my soul, nice write!

Grade:Excellent


 
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